{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"18120481","dateCreated":"1260739581","smartDate":"Dec 13, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/18120481"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments on your final revision","description":"Good intro, but your thesis needs tweaking. Is it or isn't HOD accurate? You seem to say both. Make the distinciton you're trying to show clearer.
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\nConsider this:
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\n"Edward Garnett wrote a review on Heart of Darkness. He commented that the novel was an, "analysis of the deterioration of the white man's morale, when he is let lose from European restraint, and planted down in the tropics as an emissary of light armed to the teeth, to make trade profits out of the subject races" (Murfin 97).
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\nYou should say "qtd. in Murfin 97" in your citation since you have not read Garnett's review, but read about it in Murfin. Nice touch--giving a link to an article on Garnett.
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\nThis point needs better support:
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\n During the early twentieth century, the idea that reality can be questioned was not present; in fact, not many people had ever thought about the idea of reality, let alone question it (Gekoski 72-90)
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\nQuestioning reality, trying to figure out what it consists of, has been going on throughout human history. I'm not sure Gekoski says what you make it sound like. Also when you cite 18 pps. like this it's hard to see what one pt. you got from those 18 pages. The logic in this para. needs some work.
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\n" racism and oppression of British people who rule over India during this time. This echoes Conrad's implication of how Englishmen exploited Africans, which will be later explicated."
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\nYou mean oppression by<\/strong> the British. Also note that in HOD the pilgrims and ivory exporters that Marlow criticizes aren't Englishmen; they're Belgians.
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\nYou seem to be digressing with all the writing about Forster and Greene here. The point isn't that HOD was an influential novel for later writers, but whether or not it accurately captures the historical reality.
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\nWhy is Racism in HOD a separate subheading from themes? Couldn't you say that the presence of racism (if it's there) is a theme that Conrad is exploring?
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\nIn your 2nd para. on racism, it's hard to tell where Achebe starts. You cite him at the end of the para. but seem to be using his argument after the word, "however."
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\nThis subheading and t.s. seem to be drifting from your paper's main pt. You seem now to just be collecting themes from various critics:
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\n"Homosexuality or Homosocial?
\nWith the question of racism, Conrad describes homosocial relationships in his novel, which has led some critics to question the idea of homosexuality."
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\nThe section on Craig Raine seems to belong earlier, in the section on racism.
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\nIn the multiple narrators section, you have a long quotation from HOD, but no citation.
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\nYou refer to Wasserman, but the citation is in Billy. Say "qtd. in Billy."
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\nWhy does Imperalism follow Multiple Narrators? Isn't it related to Racism? This section does a good job of connecting to the thesis, but the order and organizatin of all of these sub-sections needs work. So do your major subheadings. What's the difference between "Accuracy in HOD" and "Historical Accuracy"? It's not immediately clear to the reader.
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\nThe Beginning of the Scramble for Africa section doesn't have any citing. Some of it is more than common knowledge. Who calls Stanley "notorious," for example?
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\nYou need a citation for this:
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\n"ancing is often part of rituals and celebrations in Congolese culture and is spiritually rooted. Dances vary between different groups in the Congo, but most are considered sacred and acknowledge the spirits they believe in. They often celebrate events that Europeans and Americans celebrate as well, such as births and rites of passage."
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\nQuote this (and cite it):"Conrad describes the natives as shells of people and part of the dirt."
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\nThis section needs work w\/ careful citing in general.
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\nGood job overall. The organization of this page needs some tightening and clarifying in places. But it's a good exploration of a lot of important issues.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"18026679","dateCreated":"1260480937","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"aaridler","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/aaridler","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/18026679"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"siting online journal article","description":"the Hume citation under the works cited is ok...but I'm just not sure how I should do the in-text citation..I put what I thought would be good in the section with multiple narrators....second paragraph...
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\nthe journal article was from Academic OneFile...fyi","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17964901","dateCreated":"1260388715","smartDate":"Dec 9, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"nfarber","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/nfarber","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17964901"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"history section","description":"A) ill edit the mega paragraph later today (at the bottom)
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\nB)is anyone able to read the name in the cartoon of the artist?? i cant! and how should i cite- just
\nlast,first. URL.
\n?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17966117","body":"i dont think it would be a big deal if you left out the name of the artwork. this is how i cited my picture:
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\nEthnic Arts Network. N.p., n.d. Web. 7 Dec. 2009. <http:\/\/www.ethnicarts.org\/<\/a>
\ndancelinks\/>.
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\ni dont really know what the N.p. and n.d. mean but thats what noodlebib put there. just fill it in with the stuff about your picture.","dateCreated":"1260389925","smartDate":"Dec 9, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"liz2342","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/liz2342","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17939083","dateCreated":"1260335084","smartDate":"Dec 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"aaridler","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/aaridler","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17939083"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"memo for tomorrow","description":"hey everyone, I know I just put this on facebook, but I was just wondering if the memo should be single spaced (double spaced between paragraphs) or doubled spaced...or does it matter?
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\nthanks for any answers!!
\nAshley","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17802505","dateCreated":"1260073258","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"aaridler","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/aaridler","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17802505"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"how to make a link from academic onefile","description":"hey everyone!
\ni was just wondering if anyone knows how to post a link to an article on academic onefile...i tried it and if you click on it it doesn't work...its under the "themes from heart of darkness" part....thanks for any help!!!
\nAshley","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17802661","body":"hey,
\nim terrible at this stuff but when i was trying to figure out stuff the link "help on how to format text" seemed like it covered many topics\/common questions...the only way i know how to get there is by posting somehting and its right under post lol","dateCreated":"1260074241","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"nfarber","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/nfarber","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17806419","body":"if you can't get it to work, i don't think it will be a problem if you just refer to the journal in the text and have it cited in the works cited section","dateCreated":"1260115150","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"liz2342","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/liz2342","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17810391","body":"yeah, im thinking that's what I'll probably do...thanks though!","dateCreated":"1260127968","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"aaridler","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/aaridler","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17795921","dateCreated":"1260049607","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"liz2342","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/liz2342","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17795921"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"make text next to picture","description":"In the Congolese Culture section I am trying to make it so the text is right next to the picture i added, not right under it. Can someone tell me how to do that or do it for me?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17714189","dateCreated":"1259871980","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"liz2342","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/liz2342","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17714189"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"to do list","description":"i sent this to you guys in a facebook message but i'll post it here too:
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\nokay so over the weekend how about we all just work on the wiki and make it the final product. here are things we need to do still
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\n-fix the first section (add ashley's stuff to sections already there)
\n-read over nicole's section and find passages from heart of darkness that are similar to things that really happened (we can all do this)
\n-add section about the youtube video, and make it a link instead of embedded
\n-add a few more pictures
\n-finish section about congolese culture. i might do this this weekend
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\nand then next week on monday or tuesday, we can all meet in the lounge and go over the wiki and see if there is anything left. and then we will be done :)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17661645","dateCreated":"1259795297","smartDate":"Dec 2, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17661645"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Some Articles","description":"Hi Group 1,
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\nI just attached 2 PDF files at the very top your page. They are articles on HOD. One is about the "immediate context" of HOD. The 2nd one is a response to Achebe's claims that HOD is racist. Maybe these things will help you w\/ parts of your paper.
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\nPlease keep me posted on your progress and on any questions you have.
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\n- \"cpenna\"<\/a> cpenna<\/a><\/span>","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17638239","dateCreated":"1259772662","smartDate":"Dec 2, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"liz2342","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/liz2342","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17638239"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"OUr Meeting","description":"Consider more of 2-part structure:
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\n1. Critical issues the book has raised. Possibly organized by chronology, possibly by theme.
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\n2. How well does it (or doesn't it) reflect historical reality?
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\nPenna","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17618839","dateCreated":"1259738496","smartDate":"Dec 1, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17618839"},"dateDigested":1532428728,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Some Preliminary Comments on Your Rough Draft","description":"Some of the section on Accuracy seems to slip into what the critics have said (i.e., your first section). Some of that first section could use some of the material from the last section, esp. what Achebe says. Also, why is that first section organized by critics instead of by themes or ideas? What about the early reactions to HOD by Conrad's contemporaries?
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\nIn the section on Accuracy, you really have very little reference to the book itself. In fact that's one thing yo9ur paper needs more of. HOD doesn't even appear in your W.C.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}