{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"18123077","dateCreated":"1260744092","smartDate":"Dec 13, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/18123077"},"dateDigested":1532428726,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments on your final revision","description":"At first glance your page looks pretty good, though you have some mixed fonts in the section on History in the Story vs. Reality.
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\nYour orgnaization of subheadings makes sense, except for the position of Stanley's expedition. How does that fit under Conrad's experience in Africa Vs.the Account in HOD?
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\nIntro and thesis are clear. But give an idea of the organization of your page in the intro. You trace the critical reception, but don't set that up in the intro very clearly.
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\nThe 1st para. of the overview of the critical reception section needs development. Explain how looking at the critical reception connects to your analysis of the historical accuracy of the work.
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\nYou need a citation for this:
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\n"In a letter to William Blackwood, Conrad expressed that the subject of his African story was "very much our time."
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\nThis citation should say "qtd. in Murfin" since you didn't read Moser's review, but got if from Murfin:
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\n"Moser makes the insight that \u201cMarlow in the jungle is like the reader in text, that somehow Marlow\u2019s quest for self-knowledge must be doubled by our own.\u201d (Murfin 101-102)."
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\nThis is not a sentence: " Ede, building on Achebe\u2019s famous essay \u201cAn Image of Africa: Racism in Conrad\u2019s Heart of Darkness.\u201d
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\nThis needs a citation: "However it is still disputed whether Conrad\u2019s purpose was to support or protest imperialism, and whether or not he was referring to imperialism in general, or just Belgian imperialism in the Congo." Who disputes this? Who raises these questions? Also, in the previous sentence, you cite Papke, but don't list him in your W.C.
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\nThe section on Conrad's experiences is also relying on sources that don't appear in your W.C. It also has a lot of c-s errors.
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\nSeveral entries in your W.C. aren't cited in the body of your page.
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\nThere is some good information in this page, but the writing is uneven in places, and there are problems with effective and approrpriate use of sources in several places as well.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17741349","dateCreated":"1259910886","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17741349"},"dateDigested":1532428726,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Some Comments on Your Rough Draft","description":"Here are some comments that came to mind as I read your rough draft. They're in no particular order of importance.
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\n1. You need at least 6 sources--among them, obviously, should be Conrad.
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\n2. You have a thesis, but why is the page organized in the way you have it? Why does critical reception come at the end? You need a much stronger intro and a sharper thesis. You need to also set up the fact that you're going to discuss the critical reception of the book.
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\n3.In the paragraph on Imperialism, you have no citations (even though you have a quotation).
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\n4. The information on the Congo sounds more like your notes than paragraphs written for a purpose. Keep the larger, overall purpose of this paper before the reader in all of the sections. Additionally you don't refer to HOD anywhere in this section pointing out the way (as your thesis says) Conrad accurately parallels this historical information.
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\n5. The information on Fredrick Karl is interesting, but what does it have to do w\/ the historical accuracy of the book? If you want to say the book does more than give an historical representation, that it also gives an interesting look at psychological issues, that's fine. But set it up that way. But this is a section on the critical reception. Why do you start w\/ Karl? How are you tracing the critical reception? Chronologically? Thematically? Tell your reader.
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\n6. Depiction of history in story vs. reality<\/strong> Why does this section come after critical reception? Again, the overall organization of this page needs work.
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\n- \"cpenna\"<\/a> cpenna<\/a><\/span>","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17661855","dateCreated":"1259795542","smartDate":"Dec 2, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17661855"},"dateDigested":1532428726,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Some Articles","description":"Hi Group 4,
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\nI just attached 2 PDF files at the very top your page. They are articles on HOD. One is about the "immediate context" of HOD. The 2nd one is a response to Achebe's claims that HOD is racist. Maybe these things will help you w\/ parts of your paper.
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\nYou realize that you don't have your complete rough draft here yet, right? Remember it's due by midnight tonight.
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\nI'll see you on Friday. In the meantime, please keep me posted on your progress and on any questions you have.
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\n- \"cpenna\"<\/a> cpenna<\/a><\/span>","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17212789","dateCreated":"1258743937","smartDate":"Nov 20, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mlefelar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mlefelar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17212789"},"dateDigested":1532428726,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Project Outline","description":"This past week, our group has not done a lot with our project, but we have been taking small steps towards a working thesis. We have thrown a few ideas back and forth about how we want to approach the layout and structure on the wiki. So, we have started collecting data of different topics, all relevant to the prompt. For example, we have researched history such as African and European history and history of the ivory trade. Additionally, we have looked deeper into the actual text of Conrad's Heart Of Darkness and researched both negative and positive feedback from critics. We still have a lot more work to do, but we are getting somewhere.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17217255","body":"Thanks for submitting this, Marley. I would suggest that your group start putting some of these ideas on the wiki page itself. If you have thought about the layout, put a possible layout on the page. That way I can see it and give you suggestions about it.
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\nA little bit of progress every day will help make this task easier.
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\n- \"cpenna\"<\/a> cpenna<\/a><\/span>","dateCreated":"1258748251","smartDate":"Nov 20, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"16854743","dateCreated":"1258132208","smartDate":"Nov 13, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mlefelar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mlefelar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/16854743"},"dateDigested":1532428726,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Penna 11\/13 in class project","description":"1. Title: African fiction and Joseph Conrad : reading postcolonial intertextuality \/ Byron Caminero-Santangelo.
\n Author: Caminero-Santangelo, Byron
\n Call number: Morris Library PR6005.O4 Z5695 2005
\n This book explores the post colonial cultural hybridity in
\n Africa in the Kenyan perspective and Western perspectives. So,
\n the disruptions or falsehoods of Conrad's description of post
\n colonial times is explained.
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\n2. Conrad in the 21st Century: Contemporary Approaches and
\nPerspectives
\n Call Number: Morris Library PR6005.04 Z581154 2005
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\n3. Approaches to teaching Conrad\u2019s "Heart of darkness" and "The secret sharer"
\n Author: Hunt Hawkins and Brian W. Shaffer
\n Call Number: Morris Library PR6005.O4 H4739 2002
\n This book discusses the relationship between Conrad's writing
\n and the history of the Congo at that time. For example, the
\n book addresses slavery and the ivory trade in the 1890s.
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\n4. Database: Google Scholar Beta
\n Search: Heart of Darkness & Dutch Imperialism in the Congo
\n Title: Conrad's Critique of Imperialism in Heart of Darkness
\n Author: Hunk Hawks
\n PMLA, Vol. 94, No.2(Mar.,1979),pp.286-299
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\n5. The Penguin Addition of Conrad's Novels: A Review USA","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}