{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"18135521","dateCreated":"1260768407","smartDate":"Dec 13, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/18135521"},"dateDigested":1532428721,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments on your final revision","description":"Overall, this page looks nice and clean and uses subheadings clearly and logically. When you get to the sub-subheadings of author's reality, etc. you ought to bold or italicize them to make them stand out more.
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\nSome sections need tightening. They repeat themselves. E.g., you say several times that scientific writing is the most guidleline-oriented style.
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\nThere are also places where I'd like to see a concrete example of (for instance) a piece of legal writing that does what you say that type of writing does.
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\nWhere does this list come from?
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\nElements of Business Writing that Contribute to 3 goals:
\n1. Active and Imperative voice
\n2. Clear and Concise Wording
\n3. Shorter Sentences
\n4. CONTENT, CONTENT, CONTENT
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\nIt's not clear how the graphic from Business Communication Quarterly relates to the material you've written (partly b\/c of its location.
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\nIn the humanities section, it's not clear why you want your reader to read the articles you've attached. You should summarize the key pts. of the article and tell the reader that he or she can see more details by clikcing on the link. In a way you do do this in subsequent paragraphs. But you need to set up how you're going to use that article a little more clearly. You do good analysis in this section, but in your 2nd-to-last para. it's not clear where the cited material begins. Introduce borrowed mateial.
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\nThe section on the novel is very underdeveloped. The conclusion too needs some developoment. It is a little repetitious.
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\nSent. level issues--c-s errors and run-ons, mostly in sentences w\/ "however" are a problem.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17920571","dateCreated":"1260310953","smartDate":"Dec 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17920571"},"dateDigested":1532428721,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback on your revision","description":"
\nThis version is getting better. Below are a few observations for you to think about.
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\nIntro is much better. It helps explain the organization of your paper. But it needs to be tightened.In places it seesm to ramble. It also needs to be proofread much more carefully (run-ons with "however," shifting tense, for example).
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\nThese sentences seem out of place in the overall intro:
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\nThe thesis comes first in a paper which is why showing the author\u2019s reality is the first category being discussed in each section. In essence a thesis portrays what the author wants to communicate to the reader and so the author proceeds to persuade the reader and shape the reader's reality.
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\nIf you explained what the reader will find in each subheading a little more clearly and carefully and then told the reader that you list those 3 things in the order you have below (showing the author's reality, persuading the reader, and shaping the reader's reality) these 2 sentences would make a little more sense. But right now they just seem tacked on to the end of the paragarph.
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\nScientific writing is better now. But don't put the trans. into legal writing at the end of this subheading. Put it in the beginning of the new section. (This same thing occurs at the end of all your subheadings.)
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\nThe section is less like a list of notes--so that makes it better, but, again, the writing needs to be tightened.
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\nThe section on the humanities conflates persuasion and shaping the reader's reality into one category. Why?
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\nI don't see any real changes in the novel section. Your revised intro makes a good case for it, but the section itself still sounds like an encyclopedia article. You also have printed the exact same paragraph twice at the end of this section.
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\nBiographies: this section also is unchanged and very weak. It's also not mentioned in your intro. Do you intend to delete it?
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\nYour conclusion is fine.
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\nYour Works Cited needs work--it's not alphabetized.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17921367","body":"Thank you. We plan on getting rid of the biographies section. The humanities section and the novel section are still being worked on though. The categories that are lumped together in the humanities section are also going to be split into two like they should be.","dateCreated":"1260311964","smartDate":"Dec 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"djcliff","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/djcliff","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17794957","dateCreated":"1260046878","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"djcliff","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/djcliff","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17794957"},"dateDigested":1532428721,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Group meeting","description":"Monday at 3:30.
\nThis is the format that we discussed today...Format of the paper
\n*Small introduction that addresses the thesis and also refers back to the order we talked about in the introduction to the paper. Go into detail about the purpose.
\n*examples of the specific type of writing.
\n*three parts of the thesis (showing, persuading\/proving)
\n*transition into the next section","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17794063","dateCreated":"1260044277","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"djcliff","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/djcliff","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17794063"},"dateDigested":1532428721,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Dylan novel section","description":"Novels
\nIts not about the types of novels but specifically state that there is one general format but the specifics are different. Structure is the same but the styles is different. Definite reason for including novels in the project. All the other pieces have a set format and style and guidelines but a novel is more individual based a lot more on the author\u2019s reality. We put it in to show that not all writing has to follow guidelines but it still has some form of structure or similarities.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17716653","dateCreated":"1259874429","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17716653"},"dateDigested":1532428721,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Some Comments on Your Rough Draft","description":"Here are some things that I noticed as I read your draft. They're not in any particular order of importance.
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\n1. The intro needs development. For a paper like this you probably need a couple paras or more of intro setting up what you're going to talk about and explaining why you chose these particular types of writing.
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\n2. The section on the sciences seems too much like a collection of notes or a list--esp. in the beginning.
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\n3. The categories you discuss (things like persuading the reader and shaping the reader's reality don't seem to have a reason for their order. Is there one? Can you make your reason for this order clearer to the reader? It also seems as if there's some overlap and repetition in some of those categories.
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\n4. The question of order also holds for the types of writing you discuss. Why are they in this order?
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\n5. Under legal writing, I again think that there's some overlap in the different categories. (And this is true of all the different types of writing.)
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\n6. The section on business writing does a pretty good job of analyzing stylistic things (active vs. passive voice, sentence length). This is something all sections might consider.
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\n7. This section doesn't match the other sections in taking its various sub-categories. Nor do the next two sections.
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\n8. The novel is problematic here. It's fiction and thus very different from the other types of writing. I'm not sure why you include it. You also tend to make this section sound like an encyclopedia report--and you shouldn't. The section on biography has the same problem.
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\n9. Just as you need a strong intro, you need a strong conclusion.
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\n- \"cpenna\"<\/a> cpenna<\/a><\/span>","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17570953","dateCreated":"1259683903","smartDate":"Dec 1, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"djcliff","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/djcliff","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17570953"},"dateDigested":1532428721,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Results from first day in computer lab","description":"I can't figure out how to find the old post but I'm pretty sure this was all that was in the first posting...
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\nOur group found multiple useful resources when using the search terms, writing style. We had approximately 401 hits. Below are the numerous sites that we found when doing our research:
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\nFound:
\nAuthor: Budgell, Brian Stephen. Title: Writing a biomedical research paper : a guide to structure and style \/ Brian Stephen Budgell. Published: Tokyo ; New York : Springer, c2009. Descr. vi, 66 p. : ill. ; 19 cm. Location: Morris Library | R119 .B83 2009 | Normal Loan
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\nAuthor: Martinsek, Amanda; Title: Legal writing : how to write legal briefs, memos, and other legal documents in a clear and concise style \/ Amanda Martinsek.
\nPublished: New York : Kaplan Pub., c2009.
\nDescr. vii, 262 p. : ill. ; 23 cm. Location: Morris Library | Reference KF250 .M372 2009 | Non-Circulating
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\nAuthor: Pyne, Stephen J., 1949- Title: Voice & vision : a guide to writing history and other serious nonfiction \/ Stephen J. Pyne. Published: Cambridge, Mass. : Harvard University Press, 2009. Descr. x, 314 p. : ill. ; 22 cm. Location: Morris Library | PN145 .P96 2009 | Normal Loan
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\nAuthor: Beins, Bernard. Title: Effective writing in psychology : papers, posters, and presentations \/ Bernard C. Beins and Agatha M. Beins. Published: Malden, MA : Blackwell Pub., 2008. Descr. ix, 269 p. : ill. ; 23 cm.
\nLocation: Morris Library | Reference BF76.7 .B45 2008 | Non-Circulating
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\nAuthor: Holoman, D. Kern, 1947- Title: Writing about music : a style sheet \/ D. Kern Holoman. Edition 2nd ed. Published: Berkeley : University of California Press, c2008. Descr. xi, 105 p. : ill., music ; 23 cm. Location: Morris Library | ML3797 .W75 2008 | Normal Loan \\
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\nMultimedia:
\nTitle: Resumes [videorecording] : a how-to guide \/ writer, producer, director, Paul Shannon ; Real Arts Media; Cambridge Educational ;. Published: Princeton, NJ : Films Media Group, [2008]. Descr. 1 videodisc (24 min.) : sd., col. ; 4 3\/4 in. Location: Media | DVD-Limited Circulation DVD 5528 | Media Loan","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17571721","body":"Turns out I posted it on the main page as opposed to ours..here is what I wrote originally.
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\nToday we searched "writing style" in Delcat and had 401 hits. We found these books to be most central to our topic:
\n-Writing a Biomedical Research Paper: a guide to structure and style by Brian Stephen Budgell. (Call number:R119 .B83)
\n-Voice and Vision: a guide to writing history and other serious nonfiction by Stephen J. Pyne. (Call number:PN145 .P96)
\n-Legal Writing: how to write legal briefs, memos, and other legal documents in a clear and concise style by Amanda Martinsek. (Call number:KF250 .M372)
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\nWe also found a multimedia source that is related to our topic.
\n-Resumes: a how-to-guide directed by Paul Shannon. (Call number: DVD 5528)","dateCreated":"1259684621","smartDate":"Dec 1, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"djcliff","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/djcliff","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17570067","dateCreated":"1259683099","smartDate":"Dec 1, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"djcliff","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/djcliff","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17570067"},"dateDigested":1532428722,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"First discussion","description":"I'm not sure what happened to our first discussion that I posted..it doesn't seem to be up here anymore even though it says there are two discussions? Professor Penna is there a way this could have been deleted?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17220325","dateCreated":"1258752324","smartDate":"Nov 20, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"jcagney1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jcagney1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17220325"},"dateDigested":1532428722,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Outline","description":"This week my group met and talked about our thesis. We divided up some of the topics that we came up with so each person can do some research and then we plan to meet again soon to talk about what we found. Our idea for our thesis is to show how various types of writing have similarities and common goals even though they are all very different. Some examples of the similarities of types of writing and author's goals that we came up with while brainstorming were the use of performance in every type of writing, the goal of persuading the reader and proving their point, and showing the author's reality. Our general format for our wiki will be each type of writing as the titles and each similarity\/goal as subtitles. While brainstorming, we thought that most types of writing fall under the following categories:
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\n -Sciences
\n -Law
\n -Poetry
\n -Business
\n -Humanities
\n -Prose
\n -Fiction
\n -Non-fiction
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\nIn each of those categories, we plan to address to similarities\/goals...
\n -performance
\n -persuading the reader
\n -proving a point
\n -showing author's reality
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\nThe conclusion will remind our reader that every type of writing appears to be different but each type has the common goals that we discussed.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17265661","body":"Thanks for posting this, Julia. Sounds as if your group's been thinking a lot about this. I have a couple of suggestions.
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\n1. You should start putting your subheadings on the wiki page. You can always add or subtract from them as you do your research. As you think of things or find things write them on the page under the appropriate subheading. Having it on the page will allow you to see how much you actually have done and what you still need to do.
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\nSome of the categories you have above need to be re-thought. There's a lot of overlap. Everything is prose (except poetry). Everything is non-fiction (except for fiction and poetry). I'd also probably stay away from poetry and fiction since they are so different from more typical types of writing.
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\nYou don't mention audience in your list of things that writers probably are concerned about in all types of writing, but you need to think about that. Also, all writing isn't trying to argue for a point. Sometimes writing is just reporting on something or teaching someone how to do something, right? What about the format of various types of writing? Have you thought about that? What does a legal brief look like? What parts does it have? What about an article in engineering (to pick one of the sciences) or a business letter? Think about the formal aspects of types of writing.
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\nKeep up the good work you've been doing in thinking about these things. Let me know what questions you have or how I can help.
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