{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17740433","dateCreated":"1259905659","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17740433"},"dateDigested":1532428689,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Some Comments on Your Rough Draft","description":"1. On first glance the page looks nice, but you need captions and source citations for all of the graphics.
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\n2. Your list of points under general aims needs to be cited more clearly--but avoid just dumping lists of information on your pages. Write paragraphs into which you weave information you've found.
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\n3. Much of the page is simply listing facts or your notes. Set up the video. Analyze what's going on it in terms of WRITING. Don't just put it on the page w\/o comment.
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\n4. This section makes it sound as if you're writing a how-to page for journalists:
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\nFive Common Mistakes of Beginning Journalists.
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\nBut that's not the purpose of this page or of this assgt.
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\n5. This page gets better when you start assessing the strengths. This is an interesting point:
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\n"Word choice and sentence structure are basic enough to be easily comprehensive, but have enough flourish to show the journalists education and skill as well as make the story interesting. "
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\nCan you demonstrate this with a piece of journalistic writing? Could you (as a group) put a piece of journalistic writing side by side with a business letter and a legal document and demonstrate<\/strong> some of the characteristics of each type of writing?
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\n6. The point you're trying to make about the two headlines isn't clear. Explain the difference between the 2.
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\n7. Creation of reality section is pretty good.
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\n8.Why are all the cartoons at the bottom of the page?
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\n- \"cpenna\"<\/a> cpenna<\/a><\/span>","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}