{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17740717","dateCreated":"1259907045","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cpenna","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cpenna","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/engl-110-research-projects.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17740717"},"dateDigested":1532428679,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Some Comments on Your Rough Draft","description":"This page looks nice overall.
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\nSome things need explaining--those links you have to things like Michael Jackson's will. Tell the reader what he or she will see by clicking there. Also, are these things positioned in the best place? Why, for example, do you have the sample contract in the place you've put it? Is it just for decorative purposes, or do you want to talk about the format and content of a contract as exemplifying legal writing?
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\nThe beginning of the section "Characteristics of Legal Writing" seems to repeat what you say at the beginning of the page. This section, by the way, does a pretty good job of referring to other types of writing in your project and showing how legal writing is similar and different from other types. This might be a good approach for all of the pages to follow.
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\nIt's not clear what you're trying to show with the long block quotation. Is this a good or bad example of legal writing? Explain which it is and why it is.
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\nSomething's missing from this sentence, plus it repeats a point you've already made about conciseness:
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\n"With respeclonger need t to being strong in conciseness, legal writing is by nature more clear, which is important in that the reader often does not have enough time to read through unnecessary diction (Neumann 208). "
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\nIn the creation of reality section, give an example of each type of writing you mention. For example, you talk about functional legal writing. Is a will (like the one you have earlier) an example of this? I think it is, so say so here.
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\nWhy do you just link to the Declaration of Independence w\/o any comment? Why not embed the picture of it?
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